Sunday, January 18, 2009

Messages

Here is draft poem #4 included here for your feedback and comments. I'm not sure I like this one. What do you think?

Messages

by Paul Warloski

He drank from the paper
cup of coffee until
the message

at the bottom of the cup
told him to stop. Otherwise,
he’d drink coffee until

the bottom of that cup
dissolved into stares
of disbelief. But still

he writes in his leather-bound
notebook about the bugs
hovering over the cup.

copyright 2009 by Paul Warloski

2 comments:

  1. Christine WarloskiJanuary 26, 2009 at 7:46 PM

    I like this one, it creates a good image of you in the coffee shop. not sure what the disbelief is?

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  2. hey hey,if it isnt p. wizzle,nice poem,ohand the picture at the top...SCARY!!!

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