Here is draft poem #4 included here for your feedback and comments. I'm not sure I like this one. What do you think?
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by Paul Warloski
He drank from the paper
cup of coffee until
the message
at the bottom of the cup
told him to stop. Otherwise,
he’d drink coffee until
the bottom of that cup
dissolved into stares
of disbelief. But still
he writes in his leather-bound
notebook about the bugs
hovering over the cup.
copyright 2009 by Paul Warloski
I like this one, it creates a good image of you in the coffee shop. not sure what the disbelief is?
ReplyDeletehey hey,if it isnt p. wizzle,nice poem,ohand the picture at the top...SCARY!!!
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